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I love the spam of seashell clipart. Not. And what's with all the damned jewels? The colors are blinding me. And what is this?
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Okay my friend here my new FC's for 2012 and her name is Dabrina the Diver Hedgehog! <3 And she's the cousin of Zabrina the Diver Hedgehog! And she loves to eat a lot! XD
Dabrina is a very sweet 16 years old Diver Hedgehog who loves to eat a lot and dose not get fat at all when she eats! Dabrina love to make friend and she's very funny and silly so she like to make the outer's laugh by making cute and funny face and doing funny and silly dances and tricks and telling jokes to everyone to make them laugh!
Dabrina was only a new bron Diver Hedgehog when her Family was killed by Team Diver Killers and her cousin Zabrina found little new born Dabrina under a bunch of seaweed crying so very much because Dabrina did not know what was going on because she was to young to know what was happen to her Family and the great Village Aquatint!Dabrina stay with Zabrina until Dabrina was two years old and something happen to both her and Zabrina and they got seperated for a huge storm out at sea because her and Zabrina where sailing on a little boat when the huge Tsunami wave comes out of know where and hits the boat that Dabrina and Zabrina where on making the both of them fall into the water and she seperated away form each outer by the waves.Dabrina was all a lone after getting seperated form her cousin Zabrina after getting hit by that huge Tsunami wave and see Zabrina get taken away form her by a wave. Dabrina had a hard time swimming through the strong wave because she was only two yeah old and she did not know how to swim that good so she was having a hard time and all most drown too but she made it to land and hind in a small cave and wait for the storm to go a way.Dabrina was walking around in the park and she was hungry and was looking for food and she saw Cici sitting down cleaning her Star Staff and she saw two Ice Cream Pops next to Cici and Dabrina run as fast as she can and took the two Ice Cream Pops with out Cici knowing and she eat them really fast! And when Cici want one of her two Ice Cream Pops she found out they where both gone and did not know that Dabrina eat her two Ice Cream Pops!After that Cici got up and walk a way and she when to sit under a tree and had a bag of strawberries slices and she sat under the tree and Cici fell a sleep and Dabrina see that Cici was sleep and she run over to Cici and took her bag of strawberries slices and she start to eat up Cici's strawberries slices when Cici start to wake up Dabrina got shocked and she run and hide in a bush form Cici but after Cici wake up she found that her strawberries slices where gone and she hear Dabrina moaning form the bush and Cici walk over and found Dabrina and giggle at her because Cici found out who ate her strawberries slices & her two Ice Cream Pops!Dabrina was walking around the park looking for food and she stop and found a lot of berries bushes and she got happy as she run down to the bushes and start to eat the berries as she hear a giggle and she look and she saw Cici again picking berries and Cici was giggleing at Dabrina because she thinks Dabrina is cute and funny! So Dabrina giggles a little and after she talks with Cici and Cici telled Dabrina that she have no brother's and sister's and Dabrina fell bad for Cici and telled Cici that she will be her sister and Cici was very happy to hear that and so now both Cici and Dabrina are sisters!When Dabrina get's really pissed off or very angery her dark green eye's will turn blood red and go like cat like eyes and her fangs and claws will go long and long sharp razor blades will pop out the sides of her arms and at the bottom of her legs and the jewel's on Dabrina's fore head and the back of her hands start to glow bright the quills on her back will glow white and they will shape into Fin Wings and Dabrina will go into rage mode and she will roar loudly at who ever mad her very angery or hurt her sister Cici or her cousin Zabrina and she will blast her enemies a way with a huge water beam or a huge hyper water beam out of her mouth! And when Dabrina comes out of rage mode she will become very weak and tired because she use up all her powers in rage mode! Dabrina is more powerful then her cousin Zabrina!Dabrina can cast a water breathing spell on her to help her to breath and talk underwater! Her water breathing spell will last up to seven hours underwater so they can stay underwater for a long time! And she can cast her water breathing spell on them, so they can breath and talk underwater! Her water breathing spell will last up to seven hours underwater so they can stay underwater for a long time and be with Dabrina! Dabrina does not like to hold her breath underwater because she find it stupid so she able to cast a water breathing spell on her to help her to breath and talk underwater! But she is still able to hold her breath for hours and withstand pressure underwater! She has the abilatie to hold her breath underwater for days without comming up for air because she's a water type but she can't breath underwater! If she open her mouth underwater she will drown fast because she can't breathe water! She the only water type that need to put on scuba gear to go underwater some time when she does not feel like holding her breath!Dabrina is the only one of her species that know how to cast a water breathing spell on herself or her friends! She teach herself how to cast the water breathing spell because she does not like holding her breath underwater all the time because she want to breathe water and feel like a true sea creature so she when on a quest to know how to cast the water breathing spell!
Okay, let's go over that bit-by-bit.
Okay my friend here my new FC's for 2012 and her name is Dabrina the Diver Hedgehog! <3 And she's the cousin of Zabrina the Diver Hedgehog! And she loves to eat a lot! XD
I'm not your friend. Mainly because your English disgusts me. And don't we all like to eat? If we didn't eat, we'd starve, jackass.
Dabrina is a very sweet 16 years old Diver Hedgehog who loves to eat a lot and dose not get fat at all when she eats! Dabrina love to make friend and she's very funny and silly so she like to make the outer's laugh by making cute and funny face and doing funny and silly dances and tricks and telling jokes to everyone to make them laugh!
Dabrina is 'very sweet'? Sounds like a supersue to me. And explain how she never gets fat. (And why do I feel as if this was a reference to something outside of the Sonic universe?) We all like making friends. I am silly most of the time, but I don't make funny faces or do funny dances, nor do I go yell my (bad) jokes at every neighbor.
Dabrina was only a new bron Diver Hedgehog when her Family was killed by Team Diver Killers and her cousin Zabrina found little new born Dabrina under a bunch of seaweed crying so very much because Dabrina did not know what was going on because she was to young to know what was happen to her Family and the great Village Aquatint!
This run-on sentence hurts my mind.
Dabrina stay with Zabrina until Dabrina was two years old and something happen to both her and Zabrina and they got seperated for a huge storm out at sea because her and Zabrina where sailing on a little boat when the huge Tsunami wave comes out of know where and hits the boat that Dabrina and Zabrina where on making the both of them fall into the water and she seperated away form each outer by the waves.
Your grammar is as horrible as your OC's backstory.
Dabrina was all a lone after getting seperated form her cousin Zabrina after getting hit by that huge Tsunami wave and see Zabrina get taken away form her by a wave.
'All a lone'? 'Form her cousin'? What is going on?!
Dabrina had a hard time swimming through the strong wave because she was only two yeah old and she did not know how to swim that good so she was having a hard time and all most drown too but she made it to land and hind in a small cave and wait for the storm to go a way.
I don't even... 'Two yeah old'...
Dabrina was walking around in the park and she was hungry and was looking for food and she saw Cici sitting down cleaning her Star Staff and she saw two Ice Cream Pops next to Cici and Dabrina run as fast as she can and took the two Ice Cream Pops with out Cici knowing and she eat them really fast! And when Cici want one of her two Ice Cream Pops she found out they where both gone and did not know that Dabrina eat her two Ice Cream Pops!
How the fuck is this important?
After that Cici got up and walk a way and she when to sit under a tree and had a bag of strawberries slices and she sat under the tree and Cici fell a sleep and Dabrina see that Cici was sleep and she run over to Cici and took her bag of strawberries slices and she start to eat up Cici's strawberries slices when Cici start to wake up Dabrina got shocked and she run and hide in a bush form Cici but after Cici wake up she found that her strawberries slices where gone and she hear Dabrina moaning form the bush and Cici walk over and found Dabrina and giggle at her because Cici found out who ate her strawberries slices & her two Ice Cream Pops!Dabrina was walking around the park looking for food and she stop and found a lot of berries bushes and she got happy as she run down to the bushes and start to eat the berries as she hear a giggle and she look and she saw Cici again picking berries and Cici was giggleing at Dabrina because she thinks Dabrina is cute and funny!
Why.
So Dabrina giggles a little and after she talks with Cici and Cici telled Dabrina that she have no brother's and sister's and Dabrina fell bad for Cici and telled Cici that she will be her sister and Cici was very happy to hear that and so now both Cici and Dabrina are sisters!
'Telled'... The grammar gets worse, and worse...
When Dabrina get's really pissed off or very angery her dark green eye's will turn blood red and go like cat like eyes and her fangs and claws will go long and long sharp razor blades will pop out the sides of her arms and at the bottom of her legs and the jewel's on Dabrina's fore head and the back of her hands start to glow bright the quills on her back will glow white and they will shape into Fin Wings and Dabrina will go into rage mode and she will roar loudly at who ever mad her very angery or hurt her sister Cici or her cousin Zabrina and she will blast her enemies a way with a huge water beam or a huge hyper water beam out of her mouth!
Of course, it isn't a sue without rage mode! (Scientific and/or logical explanation, please.)
And when Dabrina comes out of rage mode she will become very weak and tired because she use up all her powers in rage mode!
Drama.
Dabrina is more powerful then her cousin Zabrina!
Aren't all sues equally powerful?
Dabrina can cast a water breathing spell on her to help her to breath and talk underwater! Her water breathing spell will last up to seven hours underwater so they can stay underwater for a long time!
Where did she get these powers?
And she can cast her water breathing spell on them, so they can breath and talk underwater!Are those minor details even important?
Her water breathing spell will last up to seven hours underwater so they can stay underwater for a long time and be with Dabrina!
You already said that, god dang it!
Dabrina does not like to hold her breath underwater because she find it stupid so she able to cast a water breathing spell on her to help her to breath and talk underwater!
Why does every sentence end in an exclamation mark?
But she is still able to hold her breath for hours and withstand pressure underwater!
So, can you please explain why she has these powers?
She has the abilatie to hold her breath underwater for days without comming up for air because she's a water type but she can't breath underwater!
If she's got water powers, why can't she breathe underwater?
If she open her mouth underwater she will drown fast because she can't breathe water!
No shit, Sherlock.
She the only water type that need to put on scuba gear to go underwater some time when she does not feel like holding her breath!
Suuuure she is.
Dabrina is the only one of her species that know how to cast a water breathing spell on herself or her friends!
That's just plain Suish. +7 Sue points.
She teach herself how to cast the water breathing spell because she does not like holding her breath underwater all the time because she want to breathe water and feel like a true sea creature so she when on a quest to know how to cast the water breathing spell!
Why couldn't anyone else? Well, that was enough to make me want to kill myself. Now on to the artist's comments.
Agh.Ack I need to stop making so much FC's because how will I use them all on RP's or pics! x.X *Fall down and dies*I got the name Dabrina form a race Horse that I saw on the TV two nights a go and she I took that name and made her as Zabrina's cousin because Zabrina dose have some cousin that are still a live she just need to find them and Dabrina is one of them! <3Okay I know she looks a lot like Zabrina the Diver Hedgehog and Mystic Mist the Diver Hedgehog because I want Dabrina to look like them because Dabrina is the cousin of Zabrina so I want to make her look like Zabrina with some of Mystic Mist look in her. <3*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*Okay I am using this base ---> [ [link] ] From a good friend name ~swordman16 I have so much fun with his bases! XDBase belong toMy DA brother! Dabrina the Diver Hedgehog belong to
Me! Cici the Cat belong to
My best sister! NO TROLLING OR I WILL BLOCK YOU FROM MY PAGE THANK YOU!!! IF YOU DON'T HAVE ANY THINK NICE TO SAY THEN DON'T SAY ANY THING AT ALL OKAY THANK YOU!!!! PLEASE COMMENT BEFORE FAVING, THANK YOU!!! RPs are acceptable too!
Ack I need to stop making so much FC's because how will I use them all on RP's or pics! x.X *Fall down and dies*
Again, incorrect punctuation. I doubt she knows what a question mark is. Also, it's simple; don't roleplay at all.
I got the name Dabrina form a race Horse that I saw on the TV two nights a go and she I took that name and made her as Zabrina's cousin because Zabrina dose have some cousin that are still a live she just need to find them and Dabrina is one of them! <3
That poor horse... Disrespected...
Okay I know she looks a lot like Zabrina the Diver Hedgehog and Mystic Mist the Diver Hedgehog because I want Dabrina to look like them because Dabrina is the cousin of Zabrina so I want to make her look like Zabrina with some of Mystic Mist look in her. <3
Why not make her look original? Oh well, at least you used a period for once.
Okay I am using this base ---> [ [link] ] From a good friend name ~swordman16 I have so much fun with his bases! XDBase belong to
Oh wow, bases.
Dabrina the Diver Hedgehog belong to
Please tell me you had permission from your sister.
NO TROLLING OR I WILL BLOCK YOU FROM MY PAGE THANK YOU!!! IF YOU DON'T HAVE ANY THINK NICE TO SAY THEN DON'T SAY ANY THING AT ALL OKAY THANK YOU!!!! PLEASE COMMENT BEFORE FAVING, THANK YOU!!!
No need to say "thank you" thrice. Also, criticism is important. If we were never criticized, we would never improve.
RPs are acceptable too!
What's sad is that I see a lot of bad (or bad in my opinion) roleplayers on dA.
It gets even worse, however.
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| DEAR GOD, WHAT AM I LOOKING AT. |
My... God... What is this... Horrifying... Thing... Is this really how she looked as a child? It's even more suish.
Alright here's a pic of Dabrina the Diverhog as a cute little Toddler Diverhog and yes I know that Dabrina is a Diver German Shepard right now but I want to draw Dabrina as a Toddler Diverhog because I want everyone to see how cute Dabrina was when she was a little Diverhog! If I'm in the mood I will draw Dabrina as a Toddler Diver German Shepard which she will have the same outfit on as Toddler Dabrina the Diverhog!
Oh I'm going to draw more pic of Dabrina form when she was young to the age she at now and I will try to draw them all as Diver German Shepard pics too but I'm going to draw them as Diverhog pic first because Dabrina was really born as a Diver Hedgehog and not a Diver German Shepard so keep a look out for more pics of how Dabrina grow up though her life time!
Okay in this pic Dabrina is about 4 years old in this pic and as you see that she have her collar around her neck and her four Jewel rings around her wrists or her ankles and she have a cute will new outfit on as she just love to play and Dabrina is kind of a noob at scuba diving because a Diverhog get's scuba diving lesson at the age of four years old and as Dabrina teach herself how to scuba dive because she was a lone at the age of four years old because the other Diver Hedgehogs where kill by Team Diver Killer and she did not know what happen to her cousin Zabrina as she teach herself how to scuba dive and she did all most drown a few times but she got the hang of scuba diving as Dabrina got really good at scuba diving! As Dabrina know if she keep up with her own scuba diving lesson some day she will be come a pro at scuba diving but for now Dabrina is just a noob at scuba diving because she's only a four year old Toddler Diverhog and she need keep up with her scuba diving lesson if she want to be a great scuba diver just like her father Sea the Diver Hedgehog!
Toddler Dabrina was at the fish market as she was under one of the table as she was get ready to take a fish when she feel a hand grab her arm as she peek form under the table and look up and see that Evil Aqua she hold her arm as Toddler Dabrina show no fear to Evil Aqua, as Evil Aqua help Toddler Dabrina to her feel as Toddler Dabrina say Evil Aqua why she grab her arm as she have this cute little look on her face as she looks up at Evil Aqua, and Evil Aqua just smiles and tell Toddler Dabrina that she want to show Young Aqua Jewel that there where more Diverhogs! Toddler Dabrina ask Evil Aqua where is Young Aqua Jewel as she look and see Young Aqua Jewel because Evil Aqua and she walk up to Young Aqua Jewel and smiles cutely as she say hello to Young Aqua Jewel as Young Aqua Jewel say hello back to Toddler Dabrina and Young Aqua Jewel was not been shy at all as Young Aqua Jewel giggles and smiles cutely back at Toddler Dabrina! After they all left the fish market Toddler Dabrina took Evil Aqua and Young Aqua Jewel to her little cave and she ask why Evil Aqua want Young Aqua Jewel to see her and Evil Aqua tell Toddler Dabrina that she need her help to teach Young Aqua Jewel how to swim and to know other Diverhog stuff as Toddler Dabrina nods happily at Evil Aqua telling her that she will be happy to help Aqua Jewel know all the Diverhog skills as she looks at Young Aqua Jewel and smiles at her and Young Aqua Jewel smiles back at Toddler Dabrina as both Toddler Dabrina and Young Aqua Jewel be come good friends as Toddler Dabrina did her best to help out Young Aqua Jewel with some of the Diverhog skills because Toddler Dabrina don't know much of the Diverhog skills just yet because she's still trying to know some of them as her and Young Aqua Jewel play happily and Evil Aqua was watching them so they wont get into trouble! Toddler Dabrina was so happy to have Young Aqua Jewel and Evil Aqua around to play with as she just know that she will be friend forever with Young Aqua Jewel!
This is a small story about how Dabrina meet Aqua Jewel when they where young but forgot each other when she got older but as you may know Dabrina have a very bad Memory so Dabrina does forget about lot of stuff as she forgot that she was friend with Aqua Jewel when they where younger!
FUCK THIS.
FUCK EVERYTHING.
I give up.
Pissed-off meter: 89.5%.
Sue meter: 97.8% Sue.
I'm going to end this review here.
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ReplyDeleteDammit, I accidentally pressed Enter. Stupid fingers...
DeleteAnyways, the 'eating a lot and not get fat' thing might be a reference to SoEW (one of the endings had Genjii telling Reimu that the Yin-Yang orb's true power is the ability to eat sweets and not get fat.) Then again, ZabrinatheDiverhog probably doesn't know anything about Touhou. So, it might be a reference to Kirby.
I doubt that though, but you could be right.
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